A Ghost Story

Annika had to write a ghost story for school, so she finally got "inspired" and wrote one. She starts a beautiful story about a little girl who loves dolls. She writes well, with lots of descriptions and dialogue. We meet the nice little girl, her (nice) family, see the family in action at their (nice) dinner, and go into quite a few details. Three pages into the nice story, the girl goes into the woods, falls into a hole, sees a ghost and dies. Then her family buries her body and mourns her loss.

The End.

Build up = 3 pages, Hole-to-deadly-ending = 1/2 page.

"How did you like it?" she wants to know.

"Ummm... it was very well written.... do you think it is a bit abrupt at the end?" I reply.

"Well, it was supposed to be scary."